Weekend Writing Warriors 8 – 7/19/2020 – Untitled WIP

Welcome back, Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks for returning for another snippet from my yet to be titled suspense murder mystery novel. Not really sure what to call it yet. I kinda do, but to label it right now would give too much away. Not sure if I want to tip my hand that much at this point. I would rather keep it under wraps right now and keep giving snippets, just to say that this novel will take turns that are quite unexpected. Be prepared.

Last week I introduced you to the main character, Lt. Daniel Masters. He is nearing the end of his almost thirty year career as a Georgia law enforcement officer. The last thing he wants is a new partner and even more is for a major case to come across his desk. Well he is handed both. This week we meet a new character, and get a mention of this new partner.

Here is were we left off:

Lawson had a perplexed look on his face, obviously without an answer.

“Well, Lawson, go find me that weapon.”

Lawson disappeared to confer with the first officers on scene.

Lieutenant Daniel Masters is a 27-year veteran Savannah Georgia Major Crimes Detective. He has seen many crime scenes like the one he saw last February. Little did he know this one would change his life. Grady, the newest addition to his team, is the first to see the abnormalities, but will the rest of the team listen in time. There is a serial murder on the loose in South Georgia, and for some reason the killer leaves their final victim alive right before committing suicide. But why? Masters and Grady must find out before its too late and the next killer strikes again.

Daniel pulled his phone out of his pocket and dialed a number.

“Sgt. Atwood,” the raspy voice answered.

“Hey there, sweet lady,” Daniel cooed.

“Lieutenant, I know you are not using official channels to perpetuate sexual harassment,” the desk Sergeant snapped. Sergeant Laureen Atwood had been on the force nearly as long as he had. They had a long-standing professional relationship that had its share of back and forth ribbing that was attune to a big sister little brother relationship.

“My apologies, Atwood,” he cleared his throat and gave a little chuckle. “I am over here in the Delmont district at the KBC incident and…”

“Masters…” Atwood interrupted, “You have a partner for this, why are you calling a Desk Sergeant for help when all I can do is sit here, stamp paperwork, and make your life a living hell?”

***Well Mighty Warriors that is this week’s snippet. Here is a bit more because completing the scene.***

“Gradiosa?” Daniels said. He was reluctant to have a new partner this late in the game. He had been without one since his last partner resigned when a case went sour two years ago. Which he part way blamed himself over. Since then Atwood was determined to make him a mentor to some rookie who would either wretch out his guts over the sight of a little blood or seemed more determined to make an impression than to listen to orders. Why would this Gradiosa be any different.

“Yes, Gradiosa. And he goes by, ‘Grady.’” Atwood corrected. “This one you better treat right. He is a long-time detective. He came over from Rampart District. His wife got a transfer with her job and they moved into the area. So play nice, he is well-seasoned, not like the others. Got it?”

“Ya, ya,” Daniels said. He was impressed hearing he was from Rampart District. They were known for not letting their ranks get muddled with the need to promote; you had to earn your stripes. To become a detective in Rampart meant something. “What’s his number?”

“It’s already on your cell. I took the liberty of programming it in for you the last time you were in. I figured you were gonna need it.”

“Alright, I’ll call him,” he said and hung up.

I know, not much action this week, but you know how the beginning of novels can be. We do get two new characters, though. We also get a little bit of background on our main character. Thanks for joining this week. I look to continue on from here, or maybe jump ahead a bit to get to a little bit of action. I’ll have to read up on it and see what I can deliver y’all.

Have a great week!!

The Five Barred Gate is still available on Amazon in Hardback, Paperback, and Kindle versions.

You can purchase direct from me on my Home Page. The benefit of buying direct is you will receive a personalized signed copy!!

My Children’s books on Elissa the Curious Snail are also on Amazon. There are 4 books about an adorable snail teaching children about prayer and believing in themselves.

You can also check out updates regarding Little Reminders of Who I Am and this current Untitled work in progress.

Fellow Warriors, I also have have been writing a weekly (okay, sometimes bi-weekly) blog that you see posted in between these snippets. Check them out. I would love to hear your thoughts.

AND if you have little warriors running around I now have many of my Children’s Short Stories on this website. They were originally on my Elissa the Curious Snail publisher’s website, but I now control that domain and am in the process of moving that content here. I have many stories here for your little reader. These are great bedtime or anytime short story. Check them out.

In His Exciting Service,

Jeff S. Bray

The Five Barred Gate is Available on Amazon

Elissa the Curious Snail Series

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12 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors 8 – 7/19/2020 – Untitled WIP

    1. One of the biggest struggles with backstory is remembering that you wrote it later on. I discovered that when writing The Five Barred Gate. I had to go through a major rewrite when I was editing because I discovered a plothole regarding backstory. AND I had outlined my characters and I still missed it. One of those heat of the moment, because it sounded good. All in all the change came TO the backstory and made the ending better.


    1. Backstory is one of the important things for new writers to think about, as I am sure most of us seasoned writers know and can attest to. Without it, readers are left wondering why a character acted a certain way. When they know where a character has been they can go along with them for the ride and not necessarily assume how they will act but feel closer to them when they do react to a situation. I am sure you have experienced this on your writing journey.


    1. With getting back into this, it has sparked something. I wrote another chapter the other night. It felt good because I had been feeling stuck for so long. Although I did have to go back and read a few times what I had written to ensure I wasn’t flubbing anything up… heaven forbid. One of the curses of having a hiatus. Now I have to go write my entry for this week. I just remembered I wrote the template, but I never wrote the snippet. OH MY!! That would’ve been interesting… :-O


  1. I’ve worked with some reg force Sgts and they don’t let anything slide. I loved the chemistry between them. I also look forward to your twist on the buddy cop trope by having two seasoned detectives working the case.


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