Weekend Writing Warriors 8 – 6/21/2020 – The Five Barred Gate

Welcome back Weekend Writing Warriors for another snippet of The Five Barred Gate!! So, what’s in the box? That is the big question that is on everyone’s mind. No its not Jack, or tacos for that matter. And no, its not tuna or kitty litter… sorry Effing. What it could be may help our small group out with their Edwards situation.

Jacob has brought a delivery to the group and he has expressed his concern for Renae, his estranged wife’s, safety. He has had a conversation with her about something she has recently discovered about her new relationship and Edwards. This leads us to this week’s snippet.

Here is where we left off:

“What I’ve seen is good enough for me,” said Eric. “Feel free to bring her by anytime. But be careful.”

“Always,” Jacob said. “Speaking of caution, I assume that’s what these are for?” Jacob handed Roger the box he brought in.

The Five Barred Gate Synopsis:
Have you ever wondered what would happen if the Non-Offensive Movement in the United States became federal law? What would happen to the freedoms guaranteed to us through the Constitution? This is the story of Jacob Andrews. He is faced with the decision to follow his heart and disregard what the law says about how he should live; even if it means his life.

SNIPPET: (with new relaxed additions so I don’t disrupt the flow)
“Ah, I was hoping they came in,” Roger said snapping open his utility knife.

“Car charger adapters?” Jacob laughed.

“Well, listing them as cell phone bug detectors on the invoice didn’t seem prudent to me,” Roger said. He opened the box and pulled out six identical smaller boxes. “One for each of us.”

“But there are only five of us,” Jacob said, realizing Will would not need one now.

“One is for Renae,” Eric said.

Jacob raised and eyebrow, “How did you know?”

“The other day at Maggie’s. I’m not blind, Jacob. It was obvious she was authentically fearful. You confirmed her innocence. It was only a matter of time before she discover the truth. To be honest, I’m glad she found out sooner than later. Now we can work with her, instead of trying to work around her.”

“You don’t have to worry about her,” Jacob vouched for his wife. “You’re right; she is just as afraid as we are.”

* * *

Well, now our friends can stay a step ahead of Edwards and his goons. Let’s hope it pays off for them. We exit this portion of The Five Barred Gate. Even though this snippet does leave on huge question on the table. I am moving a few chapters into the future next week.

Cant wait until next week to find out more? The Five Barred Gate is available for purchase on Amazon. Hardback, Paperback, and Kindle versions are available. The link is also at the bottom of this post.

You can also purchase direct from me by visiting my Home Page. There is a buy now link at the bottom of the screen. The benefit of buying direct is that you will receive a personalized signed copy.

Below that link is my Children’s book series Elissa the Curious Snail. (Also available on Amazon) It is a series of books about an adorable snail that teaches children about prayer and believing in themselves. Series at 4 books.

You can also read about updates regarding my next novel due out in August of 2020, Little Reminders of Who I Am as well as my current Untitled work.

Fellow Warriors, I also have begun writing a weekly (okay, sometimes bi-weekly) blog that you see posted in between these snippets. Check them out and I would love to hear your thoughts.

AND if you have little warriors running around I now have many of my Children’s Short Stories on this website. They were originally on my Elissa the Curious Snail publisher’s website, but I now control that domain and am in the process of moving that content here. I am adding new stories regularly, until the transfer is complete. These are great bedtime or anytime short stories. Check them out.

In His Exciting Service,

Jeff S. Bray

The Five Barred Gate is Available on Amazon

Elissa the Curious Snail Series

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12 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors 8 – 6/21/2020 – The Five Barred Gate

    1. Thanks for the compliment. I am glad to be drawing you in. It is one thing to write, knowing who and what the characters are going to do, its another to be on the reading end. Not sure if I intended to write Renae this way, but it adds to the story. I’m glad y’all are enjoying it.


  1. When I read “listing them as cell phone bug detectors on the invoice didn’t seem prudent” I had to laugh. Good one. I am concerned about Renae. Jacob seems too trusting. But then, it is his wife.

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    1. I did have a bit of a dilemma writing their relationship. Especially on how quickly they would reconnect. They were estranged, for good reason. But with his change, he became the man she originally fell in love with, but wounds do not heal so easily. And you cannot take that much time in a novel. So I guess I used his presumed death as a springboard for her to realize the loss and to fast forward her healing process. But, on the opposite end wounds can work in the opposite way as well… cause you to lash out and want to hurt as much as you were hurt. So, which is Renae? Only time will tell.


    1. I am really appreciating everyone’s compliments on my dialogue. This is the BIGGEST thing I struggle with as a writer AND the reason why I have held off on writing for so long. I have always felt that I can’t write dialogue. So your positive comments are very encouraging. Thank you. And Scribbling Scribe, they are… for now.


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