Weekend Writing Warriors 8 – 10/18/2020 – Untitled WIP

Welcome back mighty Warriors. Here we go with another addition to my Work in Progress. As I enter this week I am feeling every bit of my age. Yes, I am still young, but experiencing the realization that I am indeed older now. This week our oldest son turns 27. It seems that every year the calendar turns a page on him I feel every wrinkle. I will always remember that little boy sleeping on my chest listening to the Aladdin soundtrack.

Well, far from Agrabah and the Cave of Wonders, Grady is getting ready for his first assignment, the further investigation of why Stuart Nelson was attacked. This involves searching his vehicle.

Here is a bit from last week:

Was this a test? Grady looked at the files. He knew for now that Taylor would be a dead end. Their real lead would be the connection Taylor had to Nelson. And his first hunch was that there was a drug-running tie through his position as an Uber driver.

“Search Nelson’s car,” Grady said. “If he were running drugs, there would have to be evidence of it. We need to do it before he has a chance to dispose of it. While we are at it, we should search his place top to bottom. If we have a forensics team there, may as well sweep it for anything suspicious. Then we’d know for sure.”

Masters nodded. “Do it.”

Lieutenant Daniel Masters is a 27-year veteran Savannah Georgia Major Crimes Detective. He has seen many crime scenes like the one he saw last February. Little did he know this one would change his life. Grady, the newest addition to his team, is the first to see the abnormalities, but will the rest of the team listen in time. There is a serial murder on the loose in South Georgia, and for some reason the killer leaves their final victim alive right before committing suicide. But why? Masters and Grady must find out before its too late and the next killer strikes again.

Carmen smiled at him in recognition. He must have made an impression.

“You may still need a warrant for the car,” Carmen said. “You’re clear on the apartment, it’s still a crime scene. I will make a call. I know a clerk or two who can get hold of a judge on a Sunday,” she added with a wink. “I’ll have your warrant by lunch.”

Masters stood pointed toward the entrance gate, “The rest of the team will be up shortly. I’ll have you coordinate with them. You’ll run one team to search the car and send the other to the apartment. We need quick answers before Mr. Nelson is released from the hospital. If he is involved on a deeper level, we need to know.”


***That is this week’s ten, or so. Here is a bit more to complete this scene. ***

Masters went into his office and closed the door. He picked up his phone to make a call.

Carmen turned to him, “I think he likes you.”

“Let’s hope so. I didn’t make too good of an impression last night.”

“He’s like that with everyone at first. Sarge downstairs has put him with so many newbies the last couple of months, I’m surprised he hasn’t gone mental.”

“What did he do? Sounds like punishment?”

“No. His partner cut out a few months ago. Case went bad. Can’t really discuss it. But Chief wants him with a partner and put Atwood is in charge of doing that. So, in a way, newbie detectives can be a punishment to a seasoned veteran. But Atwood and Lieu go way back. I think she is just toying with him. So, with you, he expected just another wet-behind-the-ear rookie. But you have common sense and have shown him you can think. It surprised him. But don’t let it go to your head. You still need to prove yourself out there. Just don’t screw this one up, Grady.”

Grady smiled. Somewhat relieved. “Where’s Nelson’s vehicle?”

“All his personal property is at his residence. We didn’t take anything. No reason to. He was the victim,” said Carmen.

A group of voices grew louder through the stairwell, the team, Grady assumed. Probably coming up from the morning debriefing with the chief. The buzzer sounded, and the gate creaked. Four detectives, all in street clothes, walked in. If they weren’t in the station, you probably couldn’t label one an officer. Grady figured that was the point. Other than the holster, each bore their own style. Three men and one female. They all took him in just as he was checking each of them out.

A stern warning from Carmen. And here comes the team. I was going to skip ahead a bit this week, but this snippet handled two things that were important to the story that were brought up in comments last week. One being the warrant. The second is something that Carmen tells Grady here. It is a statement he will repeatedly remind himself of throughout the novel, and this being the origin, I had to include the conversation.

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14 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors 8 – 10/18/2020 – Untitled WIP

    1. A good impression with Masters, yes. Now he has to win over these other detectives. Carmen was a bit easier since she had a long term relationship with Masters and regarded his impression of Grady.


    1. It is a murder mystery, but I am a detailed person, so I want to get the police procedural portion down so I don’t get called out or lose a reader because of a faulty storyline. I have had this story for a while now but took some time off to do research. I wanted to make sure I had my ducks in a row, not only procedural wise but medical wise as we will discover if I get that far in my snippets.

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