Good afternoon Writing Warriors!! Here we are into a new month and Spring is just around the corner. Well, I am wishing for it. It has been a bit cold for us here in South Texas. Sorry for all of those who are struggling with worse than that and are digging out from piles of it or worse. I will be praying for you. My 25-degree chill is nothing.
My computer chose to take a nosedive after two drops of tea hit a key or two. I am still on it, I just plugged in an external keyboard and mouse. I ordered a replacement keypad, but it turned out to be the wrong one and the company I ordered it from is giving me issues about returning it. I should’ve just ordered it from HP. Which is what I need to do now. Here is a peek at my current setup.
Anyhow, just a reminder, The Transference will hit shelves on May 11. This is the Crime Thriller I introduced you to last year. I should be getting the cover this week if my publisher is on schedule. I hope he is, I would like to get onto promoting it.
Okay, enough of my woefull rambling. Here we go for this week’s snippet.
I have completed the edit for Little Reminders of Who I Was. Here is the updated Synopsis and what I am submitting to my publisher.
Derrick Anders is a college student who works in a Houston chain bookstore. He struggles between his studies, work, and a recent loss in his family. Derrick has little time for friends much less a love life, in spite of Breonna, a coworker who has her eyes set on him. And then there is Carter. He is sent to do what he does best, bringing two hearts together. But there is something unique about Derrick that Carter will not be expecting. Something that will bring back his past and he may need an old friend to help him get back on track.
Here is a bit from last time:
Last week we found Aaron being asked to take over Carter’s assignment of helping Derrick. He is given Carter’s shoebox of Little Reminders. Here are a few lines from that snippet.
“What do you need me to do?”
“Find Carter and convince him to complete his assignment,” the visitor said.
“What makes you think I have that much influence?”
“Because you are one of his success stories. It’s what he needs to see right now.”
Aaron sat, weighing the angelic being’s words. Jasmine walked by, refilling his tea and exchanging concerned glances between the three of them. Aaron waved her off.
“Is there anything else I can do?”
“Now that you mention it?” the man picked up a backpack from the floor that Aaron had not noticed before. He pulled out a worn shoe box. Aaron immediately recognized it.
“That’s Carter’s shoebox,” Aaron said. “Is that what he holds his Little Reminders in?”
“It is,” the visitor said, placing the shoebox on the counter in front of Aaron.
OKAY LET’S GET YOU TO THE NEW SNIPPET: I am going to jump ahead a into the next chapter. In this scene we find Aaron on the search for Carter. He has spent most of the day looking in places that he has known Carter to frequent, then he realized there is one place he hasn’t looked. Davies Deli.
The sweet aroma of pizza sauce and fresh cobbler danced with each other as Aaron entered the deli. He saw Pop’s top hat swooping back and forth throgh the server’s window. His eyes popped up, then a face, giving Aaron a fatherly smile. Aaron returned the gesture and scanned the room. The girls were, as usual, busy with the crowd. It was slowing down, it being after one, and the office clerks were already gone. The room was half-filled with nursing scrubs and second-half office staff.
Then there he was, tucked in a rear booth, his back toward him. The collar of his tweed coat was most recognizable, the brim of the hat, unmistakable. Carter Jennings sat in the back corner of the diner. How long he had been there, he didn’t know; it could’ve been all day. Was he waiting for him? It sounded like something Carter would do. Aaron approached the counter and called Pop around.
“Aaron, my boy,” Pop said, spatula still in his hand. “What can I do for you?”
“Hey, Pop. Sorry to bother you, I know you have a heavy wheel.”
“Anything. What ’cha need?”
“The man in the corner booth.” Aaron nodded toward him. “In the tweed. Do you know how long he’s been there?”
“Hmm, Table 13. I’m not sure. He looks familiar, though. Should I know him?”
“Yeah, we know him,” Aaron said. “Don’t worry about it. I was just curious when he came in. He’s an old friend. Didn’t want to have him waiting forever for me.”
“Okay. Well, I better get back to my flattop. Customers await, and I have another pot of secret sauce on the estufa. Mmmm Mmmm Mmmm, it is good, Aaron, my boy.”
Aaron laughed as Pop darted back through the swinging doors. He poured himself a glass of tea and inched his way toward Carter, Derrick’s Bible in hand. He didn’t feel comfortable with the whole shoebox thing, much less approaching Carter with something from it in hand. He wasn’t sure how Carter would react to him having it. One step at a time. One Reminder at a time.
“It’s about time. I was about to give up on you,” Carter said without turning around.
“I was about to say the same thing on the street until I realized where you were going.” Aaron stopped behind Carter, just out of view.
“We all circle back to what’s familiar.”
“What was wrong with your library?
“All I could see was that boy’s face. And that boy’s face led me to his mother’s.”
Scenes like this are what make it fun to be a writer. Pop was one of my favorite side characters to write. I loved his spunk. We as writers always talk about how we get those characters who tell us how they want to be written. Well Pop was one of those characters.
When writing LROWIA I did make him a bit spunky, but he kept pushing me to go further. And when I got to the point of writing the books climax, it’s where the ending of the book came from, his perspective. Don’t you love it when your characters come to life and tell you how to write your books? It is part of the reasons we do what we do.
Also in this scene we get a couple of callbacks to the original book. Those who have read the first may see them. I wanted to include as many subtle callbacks as I could without this being a sequel. One I guess you could call an easter egg.
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Hang on, Aaron, I’ll be right there to meet you at Pop’s. Seriously, I am so hungry right now!
Snippet shared on Twitter. 🙂
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Thanks for sharing!! Love it over on Twitter. Trying to build my following before the release of The Transference in May.
This book here I’m not sure will see the light of day until 2023. I don’t know. I still haven’t submitted it to my publisher.
I finished the edit last week and was working on the submission yesterday. They ask for a Synopsis, but the type of Synopsis they require is a cover to cover summary. It’s fun to write, but I didn’t finish it yesterday. So will complete that tomorrow and submit it this week. So exciting.
This scene has such a warm familiarity to it. It transports the reader with sights and sounds and, best of all, smells! Holding my breath for the results of this meeting . . .
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Thanks for that, Nancy. I try my best to pull the reader in with just that, their senses. I want them to feel like they are part of the story. And this one being inside a restaurant, I needed to do that.
Interesting excerpt. The diner feels very much like a real place we might all have been in at one time or another- well done!
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Thanks. I worked in restaurants for the better half of five years. I love to think that I captured their essence.
I cant wait to see how this meeting goes. So much tension mounting! Good job! Tweeted.
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Thanks, Jenna. I appreciate the support.
Love the scene you set, esp. with the smells. Yum! The tension you bring to this scene has me on edge. What will happen next? Nice.